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Yep

It baffles me... people that download supposedly like what you did, but they don't vote. I guess they're too lazy to press two separate buttons. Anyway, some opinions:

The scratches were a fun transition that worked very well and I'd imagine the overall track in a version of LSD Mario or something ^_^. Very loopable.

I just loved the second part with that chill-pad you had there and the overall break beat.

My only two critiques would be that:

1) the first part (start-0:30) needs a subtle crescendo of a fast-paced bass (hmm.. perhaps similar to the one you add in 0:30-end, but eighth notes instead of quarter notes)

2) I think the track seems "stuffy". It might be the over-compression (from the way I hear it, did you side-chain the pads to the beat?) and there seems to be saturation (the track seems too loud).

Anyway, I'm very surprised at the score and am voting accordingly.

T-rebel responds:

I decided to meet you half way on your suggestions, but it's still a WIP.

(1) I added a bass to the 1st part, but it's slow and deep. I might still change it to something a bit more square-wavy, and a bit higher timbre.

(2) Thanks for the EQ note. The track was actually clipping in a few places. I adjusted a lot, but I can't fix the 8-bit lead any further. It's made with Synth Maker G-30X plugin. For whatever reason, it's not affected by the master or channel volumes. Still working on the beat compression; it's in its own FX channel.

Being overrun by self-constructing nano bots

That's the sensation I'm getting while listening to this. I can seriously imagine a 3:25 minute clip with this.

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An empty warehouse lights up with the high military ranks watching from a distance. A team of scientists begin to power on a prototype machine that is next to a large block of raw metal. Perplexed the commanding officers question the machine's functions while it begins to power on.

... at first it seems as if nothing is happening, but then the block begins to disappear. Apparently it's being disassembled at a molecular level by nano bots. The scientists glare with excitment as the nanobots form an almost standalone complex mist... but something is unexpected... it's growing to fast. They try to shut down the system... no use... code red...

... the team starts to scatter while the higher ranks watch through a pair of binoculars what's happening... confused... then scared. Some scientists are being disassembled by the mist while others are escaping. A siren starts to sound. Everyone starts to run for their life. The mist seems to notice and begins to chase the prey.
===============

I'd have more in mind, but I think that I've exagerated already.

Very cool, nice job.

P.S. Perhaps the only "flaw" is that there's an interlude at [1:45-1:51] that is just a bit too empty for my liking, but nothing serious.

AliceMako responds:

Sounds like somebody has a knack for cooking up scenarios as that actually made for a compelling read, i'd get cozy with an animator in the near future if i were you.

For your pleasure i've added a voice over to said 6 seconds :3

Thanks for your time

Misleading introduction...

... really misleading. That bass drum seems just a tad too hardcore in conjuction with that delicate melody... but I guess I could be more flexible about it.

I think that adding a progressively growing number of layers (like some pads or synths) in parts like 1:55-2:43 would've helped. It felt a bit empty.

Yeah, and reducing that bass drum's... well... bass... would really help make the high pitched melody pop out more.

My 2 cents.

NaotoNekoCutie responds:

Listen to LOLI RIPE and you will see why this song is so demented. He (she?) was my main inspiration for this venture.

theeketel is right

It would truly sound good in an anime opening theme... with the voice of Megumi Hayashibara singing, for example.

Another thing is that even though you say it's incomplete it still loops stupendously.

I'm sorry for the "writer's block" you're having (considering the sheer beauty permeating through this song). Perhaps you should seek inspiration through really good movies, touching true stories or amazing people of our present time.

Wish you all the best.

P.S. yup, I also wish I could be able to make an equivalently pleasing track.

NaotoNekoCutie responds:

I have been trying to work on this song lately, but unfortunately it is still very rough towards the end.

Thank you for the support, hopefully I will finish this within the next month.

HAHHAHHAHHAHHA

oh god... *pant*... hahhahha... oh god oh god *got a tear from laughing*.

This is almost a visionary combination of mixed feelings towards the show: torture vs extremist fanboyism.

I love how you managed to NOT over-saturate your screaming voice with the mic. It just gave these 35 seconds a perfect sense of "My Little Pony is MANLY!!! YEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!
"

hahhahhaha. Great parody dude ^_^.

P.S. fav'd and 5'd for the lols and almost certain that this will be seen in many Flashes to come.

Solrac responds:

Thanks for the Awesome Feedback! (I never expected this thing to receive so much love)

Hot damn

Lucky you. You'll have no trouble earning good money.

Best wishes.

Very interesting

It has this marvelous evolution... an unfolding of elements... a slow, peaceful trip into a futuristic utopia... However, I find that your bass is way too muddy* and it takes away from the perfectly sharp-edged synths and crystal clear sounds: it almost ruins the magic you created. I'd suggest some EQing; try and lower the mids and see if things get better.

Structure-wise... damn. I wish I were this good. It's the third time I'm listening to this and even though the beginning sounds a bit flat (all because of that muddy bass) I just can't enough of your chorus and the transitions in between.

Truly well done.

*I've listened to your track with a pair of closed monitor headphones. Being closed they might enrich the bass a tad, but these headphones are meant to be as flat as possible. I'd still suggest cleaning the bass a bit.

RunningShadows responds:

Thanks. I am glad you enjoyed the track, and thanks for the advice on the bass.

Why the shitty score?!

This is blippy goodness! ^_^ Loving the groove. I'm not digging the 8-bit bass synth in the begging... it seems to start at a dissonant note compared to the blippy melody you're playing (does it go from a C3 to a C4?).

I'm at around 1:20 at this is just sound better and better. Nice transition/interlude at around 1:28.

2:19 - there's something strange and detuned about some of those blips... it could be intentional?

Damn, listen to that groove at 2:50... ha ha... kick ass... This deserves a game... I don't mean that a game should use your song, but rather a game should be made only to properly use this song! ^_^

4:00 - I'm really enjoying it.

4:30 - like the new synths with pitch modulations.

5:00 - ha ha... nice! You surprised me once again. Sounds great... new blips that fit nicely!

5:39 - Bravo!

I would've given you a straight 10 if it wouldn't have been for those two detuned or dissonant parts (which can be easily "fixed"... if it was unnintentional... who am I to change the great work of someone else?).

Cheers to you. I'll try to boost your score to the best of my possibilities.

Very soothing

I feel like closing my eyes and getting transported by the flow. Perhaps the synth-like flute is a bit too high pitched at 2:11 and there's this constant sense of saturation with the drums... fitting in other contexts, but not really with this mood you've created.

This is the only negative aspect of your song that I could notice. If it sounded more "crystal-clear" I would've given it a straight 10.

My two cents.

Anyway, melodically and structurally speaking, this is beautiful. Nice one.

A critical analysis of your composition:

lol

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